When I was 8, our cat got hit by a car. The next week, in art class, I painted a picture of a cat hit by a car. Just my way of dealing with it. They had my mother come in to talk about it. I remember the teacher telling her that art should be happy. My mother responded with 'Bullshit, tell that to Van Gough.' First time I ever heard her say bullshit.
In middle school my art teacher would never give anyone a 100 cause "art can't be perfect" most kids passed with a D or C cause she expected everyone to be world class artists or something.
There’s an episode of the children’s show Bluey (which is absolutely the best children’s show out, uncontested). In the episode her father and she are taking a walk and discover a budgie that was mauled by a cat and was very hurt. They took the budgie to the vet to have it seen and potentially save it. The budgie dies at the Vet and the father explains how that works on the way home. When they get home, Bluey asks her father or mother, can’t remember which one, to draw a dead budgie.
Good on your mom for saying that! I hate that we're taught to repress things such as death. We plan more for birthdays then deaths. I don't want my loved ones (humans or animals) or really anyone to die. But man, death is the great equalizer, why not normalize talking about it more. Art is such a good way to get some of thoughts thoughts out of your head and into a productive processing space.
when I was in third grade, my teacher called my mother in to discuss my 'disturbing' drawings. the hands of the women I drew were always tucked behind their backs, which she took as symbolism for my being trapped.
ohhh i had something like this when my parents divorced my mom cried so much that i wanted my dad dead for hurting her so much so every family "painting" i did i would draw a coffin to represent my dad.
It's very impressive. Evocative imagery, great vocabulary and I love the contrast of the gore and horror against the humor of the stupid penguin. This is art that gets a reaction. Could be the next Lars Von Trier, such a shame the system will suppress his talent.
I'm sure they were discouraged from expressing like this, and now they will spend high school feeling stifled, but the parents will pat themselves on the back and think they're great parents.
My mom was called in for me writing some 24-page long horror story in 1st grade. Teacher thought I was a serial killer. Mom thought I was a great writer. I just regurgitated shit I saw on TV.
I got sent to the counselor’s office in middle school because I wrote violent poems and showed them to my English teacher, thinking that she’d like it. I ended up having the most uncomfortable conversation of my life with my parents. My mom actually broke down crying and my dad came really close to beating the shit out of me. After that, I never wrote poetry again
I was thinking that, I hope the parents meeting was for the parents to find a more capable school with proper lined paper because this kid can really paint a picture with words. The ending was perfect
Definitely could be a possibility in Australia. We have fairy penguins in a few places in the south east, and... well. Snakes absolutely fucking everywhere.
South africa also has this type of stuff! Now we just need to find which place has the more common usage of names and we have a location! We can stop this crash before it even happens!!
“They wake up to strange sounds of people yelling in pain” and “the people “ being them is a fucking solid line. I hope they will let the kid grow and cultivate the talent!
I love it, there's a surreal foggy feeling that happens after a crash when adrenaline hands back your senses and you're figuring out what just happened. Perfectly captured. This kid has amazing intuition.
I wrote a lot of dark stories in 7th and 8th grade. I shared them with my friends and family and they thought many were funny and some were scary but they kept asking for more and would read them all the way through. Eventually they convinced me to show them to the writing teacher. She got furious with me and threatened to show them to my mom who was also a teacher. I was confused because my mom had already read most of them and enjoyed some. My mom was the one that introduced me to horror novels. Well the teacher threw a hissy fit and demanded I go see a counselor. The counselor read my stories with me and didn't really see a problem. He just kind of sighed and told me not to let the writing teacher see them anymore. It made me hate writing for the rest of school and I put zero effort into my English class because I felt like I couldn't be myself and reference the writing I actually enjoyed.
My favorite adults were morbid kids. Let 'em be weird, let 'em be in the fringes. Those people are important and no one should be jammed into a mould, especially not kids.
I always remember the part in John Waters autobiography where he talks about never feeling like a normal child. He’d beg his dad to take him to junk yards so he could gaze upon the cars, fresh from new wrecks. It was like Disneyland to him, he’d go home with new ideas and play “car accident” with ketchup…odd and peculiar but he made a success out of himself. I adore him and his films
She will join our ranks, dark and twisted as we are, to remind the shiny plastic people that they too will face mortality one day. It is a sacred calling to walk along the dead things.
My kid was really into Alice Cooper from around 4-6 years old. We had some interesting conversations with his preschool teachers about why he liked to draw guillotines!
This is some Stephen King shit and I love it. Obviously make sure the kid isn’t suffering or dealing with actual trauma, but man if that’s what they come up with at 9, in so few words… I’ll be pre-ordering whatever they eventually publish.
When our kid was a teenager she took our love from true crime and bit father than us and started browsing gore websites. Videos and images of murder, death, bodies, crime scenes, beheading, etc.
In high school, my English class become more and more morbid with their short writing prompts, it be me and unspoken rule to be worse than last weeks. One of the highlights was about dismembering a person then pouring salt on the wounds.
I got in trouble for something similar. The poem was pre written and I had to fill in the nouns. I was really into 90s rap and my teachers weren’t. Guns, drugs and girls will get you in school suspension and a conference with the parents.
Everyone talks about encouraging children to express themselves, until they express something they don't like. Then suddenly it is "Back in the box, you".
I wrote a poem like this about a black cat when i was 10 for a competition. People weren't too pleased with it either. I got second, first prize went to a girl who wrote a very basic and kinda lame poem about her little sister. I'm still pissed about it till this day 😅
Please let her know that we all love her poem too! And also please let us know- she didn’t get in trouble, did she? Please tell me they’re fostering her talent and not smothering it!
Perfect visuals. This kiddo has some awesome creative writing future. Hope the school system sees that. When my youngest was in 1st grade she hurt her knee and described the wound as “damage”. I was promptly called in and told she was “weird”, seriously, teachers word. I pulled her out for homeschooling.
Kids always have intense imaginations. Sometimes that intensity goes to some pretty dark places, and that's a good thing. It's a young mind trying to make sense of the world. When the adults in their lives react in horror and disgust, they teach the kids to suppress their imaginations. This is why we live in a world with so many incurious, unimaginative, bitter adults. Let kids be morbid. Let them imagine whatever they want. If what they come up with seems genuinely concerning, just keep an eye on it, but don't shame them or punish them for it. In fact, do the opposite - encourage them to express what's on their minds so you can see what's going on and know how to help them.
This reminds me of something my five-year-old did while he was drawing at home one day. He looked up at me and said, "Don't cry. It's only a joke!" And proceeded to tell a story about everyone we knew getting mauled by monsters. His accompanying drawings featured clawed hands coming out of the side of the page, like the Babadook. And there was blood. So much blood. He went on to tell this story to everyone else, and we had to ask him to stop. My dad blames it on me because I'm a morbid true crime writer, but I swear it came out of nowhere.
When I was in 3rd grade we did "Journal Time" where the teacher would play music and we would write about what it made us think about. In October she used a "spooky" track that involved some deep voices, clinking chains and the like.
You can just see in the carefully structured sentences that use alliteration. This is so abstracted that a lot of adults wouldn’t even be able to come up with this. This is just another example in the long list of “shit redditors do for karma”.
This child is a genius! All the stuff they wrote about can be found in video games or tv shows or movies. So no, it doesn't mean they are "evil" or "bound to hurt someone."
I mean it doesn't feel like the kids a psycho, but more like he/she's been influenced by some great writers. It's not easy to paint a picture like that
Just going to point out, little Stevie King would have never made it out of grade school today. They would have sent him for therapy and slapped a label on him really quickly.
stupid penguin
In her memory it's a penguin, but the local convent is organising a funeral for the mother superior.
Sneaky snake
Gunter!
Unexpected Billy Madison
No, stupid sneaky snake! Fuck that snake!
stupid penguin
Plot twist, it was a pangolin.
holds up spork
ITS THE PENGUIN FROM MARIO CART WII! pretty sure this is just a joke between siblings about crashing into penguins in the Arctic level
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Pro-seatbelt, Anti-speeding, and talks to the dangers of negligent zookeepers.
She should title it seatbelts
Kids are prone to find normalcy, whatever normalcy is to them.
Not as shocking as jem.
I wonder if the persons who were killed in her poem were names of actual classmates. That may be a bit more disturbing.
When I was 8, our cat got hit by a car. The next week, in art class, I painted a picture of a cat hit by a car. Just my way of dealing with it. They had my mother come in to talk about it. I remember the teacher telling her that art should be happy. My mother responded with 'Bullshit, tell that to Van Gough.' First time I ever heard her say bullshit.
"Art should be happy."
art has always been about processing emotions through creativity. the art teacher should have known better. i’m sorry about your cat :(
“Art is a way of expressing your emotions, children”
your mom rocks!
Some of the best art, music, stories and experiences are born out of deep, deep sorrow and pain.
Picasso would have been better in that context, but, yeah.
In middle school my art teacher would never give anyone a 100 cause "art can't be perfect" most kids passed with a D or C cause she expected everyone to be world class artists or something.
I just went back in time and fist-bumped your mother. That is an amazing retort.
There’s an episode of the children’s show Bluey (which is absolutely the best children’s show out, uncontested). In the episode her father and she are taking a walk and discover a budgie that was mauled by a cat and was very hurt. They took the budgie to the vet to have it seen and potentially save it. The budgie dies at the Vet and the father explains how that works on the way home. When they get home, Bluey asks her father or mother, can’t remember which one, to draw a dead budgie.
Good on your mom for saying that! I hate that we're taught to repress things such as death. We plan more for birthdays then deaths. I don't want my loved ones (humans or animals) or really anyone to die. But man, death is the great equalizer, why not normalize talking about it more. Art is such a good way to get some of thoughts thoughts out of your head and into a productive processing space.
I think it was grade 2 when one of my friends got hit in the face with a baseball bat at school (wrong place, wrong time, poor decision-making).
when I was in third grade, my teacher called my mother in to discuss my 'disturbing' drawings. the hands of the women I drew were always tucked behind their backs, which she took as symbolism for my being trapped.
I once used two colors of glaze on a ceramic pencil cup. My art teacher was heartbroken because “these were supposed to be special.”
ohhh i had something like this when my parents divorced my mom cried so much that i wanted my dad dead for hurting her so much so every family "painting" i did i would draw a coffin to represent my dad.
10/10. It's good!
You're right, it's good.
That’s pretty impressive for a nine-year-old. Hope the kid keeps writing.
This poem definitely paints a picture
It's very impressive. Evocative imagery, great vocabulary and I love the contrast of the gore and horror against the humor of the stupid penguin. This is art that gets a reaction. Could be the next Lars Von Trier, such a shame the system will suppress his talent.
I'm sure they were discouraged from expressing like this, and now they will spend high school feeling stifled, but the parents will pat themselves on the back and think they're great parents.
Very impressive!!
I feel like it left me part of me hanging at the end. EMS would have been nice.
Yeah I was thinking that at nine I. Could barely string 2 words together
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My mom was called in for me writing some 24-page long horror story in 1st grade. Teacher thought I was a serial killer. Mom thought I was a great writer. I just regurgitated shit I saw on TV.
Not if he's in the US public school system. It's designed to stamp out creativity. It's only function is to push out worker drones or debt slaves.
yea its almost like it wasnt written by a 9 year old at all
I hope this kid gets the nourishment they deserve. This is killer!
Aptly put.
Which flavour!
This child must receive its nourishment. I shall assume responsibility for it. THIS CHILD WILL CONSUME!
Nah, they got their parents called in to make sure it doesn't happen again.
I feel like a bitch for laughing cuz it sounds like they come from an abusive household that doesn’t feed them well
I got sent to the counselor’s office in middle school because I wrote violent poems and showed them to my English teacher, thinking that she’d like it. I ended up having the most uncomfortable conversation of my life with my parents. My mom actually broke down crying and my dad came really close to beating the shit out of me. After that, I never wrote poetry again
Dang your parents are probably the reason you wrote that type of poetry
Ah yes, the old beat the violence out of them gag. Oldest trick in the parenting book.
Kid has a future in writing... Probably going to grow up and write for Netflix or something...
I was thinking that, I hope the parents meeting was for the parents to find a more capable school with proper lined paper because this kid can really paint a picture with words. The ending was perfect
Stupid Penguin: The Series
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Or a future with depression lol
Adam Sandler is… The Penguin
Netflix already picked it up for a six part miniseries
Or the local news.
Oof, powerful writing.. But- where are Penguins waddling onto highways with trees and powerlines nearby and.. snakes of the sneaky variety?
Definitely could be a possibility in Australia. We have fairy penguins in a few places in the south east, and... well. Snakes absolutely fucking everywhere.
“Penguin”. The snozberriers taste like snozberries.
I don't know, kinda sounds like either Texas or Australia.
The driver was high as balls and saw a "penguin" duh.
South africa also has this type of stuff! Now we just need to find which place has the more common usage of names and we have a location! We can stop this crash before it even happens!!
Australia.
“They wake up to strange sounds of people yelling in pain” and “the people “ being them is a fucking solid line. I hope they will let the kid grow and cultivate the talent!
I read it as they died and woke up in hell
I like that it's kind of ambiguous in that "they" could be the people, or the snakes xD
I love it, there's a surreal foggy feeling that happens after a crash when adrenaline hands back your senses and you're figuring out what just happened. Perfectly captured. This kid has amazing intuition.
"I woke up to someone screaming, but as conciousness returned I realised I was alone, and it was my throat that was raw."
I read it as they regained consciousness and heard people (loved ones) screaming in emotional pain from the gruesome scene
Let the child be morbid. Not everyone thrives in the light.
When I was 9 I wrote a short story about a mummy peeling people's skin off. This is much better.
Darkness helps us all to shine.
I wrote a lot of dark stories in 7th and 8th grade. I shared them with my friends and family and they thought many were funny and some were scary but they kept asking for more and would read them all the way through. Eventually they convinced me to show them to the writing teacher. She got furious with me and threatened to show them to my mom who was also a teacher. I was confused because my mom had already read most of them and enjoyed some. My mom was the one that introduced me to horror novels. Well the teacher threw a hissy fit and demanded I go see a counselor. The counselor read my stories with me and didn't really see a problem. He just kind of sighed and told me not to let the writing teacher see them anymore. It made me hate writing for the rest of school and I put zero effort into my English class because I felt like I couldn't be myself and reference the writing I actually enjoyed.
My favorite adults were morbid kids. Let 'em be weird, let 'em be in the fringes. Those people are important and no one should be jammed into a mould, especially not kids.
We need more Tim Burtons and Del Toros
I always remember the part in John Waters autobiography where he talks about never feeling like a normal child. He’d beg his dad to take him to junk yards so he could gaze upon the cars, fresh from new wrecks. It was like Disneyland to him, he’d go home with new ideas and play “car accident” with ketchup…odd and peculiar but he made a success out of himself. I adore him and his films
She will join our ranks, dark and twisted as we are, to remind the shiny plastic people that they too will face mortality one day. It is a sacred calling to walk along the dead things.
The night is dark and full of terrors
Best thing I have read on reddit.
My kid was really into Alice Cooper from around 4-6 years old. We had some interesting conversations with his preschool teachers about why he liked to draw guillotines!
This is some Stephen King shit and I love it. Obviously make sure the kid isn’t suffering or dealing with actual trauma, but man if that’s what they come up with at 9, in so few words… I’ll be pre-ordering whatever they eventually publish.
The kid would fit into first responder culture well ironically for this exact reason
Man, you have no idea how much your comment helped me, thank you
When our kid was a teenager she took our love from true crime and bit father than us and started browsing gore websites. Videos and images of murder, death, bodies, crime scenes, beheading, etc.
In high school, my English class become more and more morbid with their short writing prompts, it be me and unspoken rule to be worse than last weeks. One of the highlights was about dismembering a person then pouring salt on the wounds.
I x'ed out of this post as I was reading your comment. Came back to say what a powerful comment. Cheers!
As long as they are happy and supported.
A better story than Ben Affleck in Deep Water
Yeah but this doesn’t have snails though and I think that’s definitely a missed opportunity
what a disappointing movie
Incredible poetry for someone so young. I saw it all in my head with so little words. The best poems do that.
I like it! She's my kind of ray of fucking sunshine.
We shall follow her career with great interest! The world is in need of more dark storytellers, I hope she continues writing :)
I got in trouble for something similar. The poem was pre written and I had to fill in the nouns. I was really into 90s rap and my teachers weren’t. Guns, drugs and girls will get you in school suspension and a conference with the parents.
That's awesome, that kid is cool
Make it into a black metal song....
sounds more like gore to me, but would be good anyway
Death metal*
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I just want a hardcore spoken word version of it.
This is my type of poem right here!
Vivid imagination. Well done
This is an INCREDIBLE poem
the phrasing is quite remarkable
Plot twist: everyone got upset because those were the names of kids in his class
Everyone talks about encouraging children to express themselves, until they express something they don't like. Then suddenly it is "Back in the box, you".
"Be unique,
You also have to teach kids tact and timing.
Reminds me of "Green is not a creative color." from Don't Hug Me I'm Scared
I wrote a poem like this about a black cat when i was 10 for a competition. People weren't too pleased with it either. I got second, first prize went to a girl who wrote a very basic and kinda lame poem about her little sister. I'm still pissed about it till this day 😅
Literally 1984
Just to clarify: I LOVE this kid and I really fucking LOVE this poem it’s mad
Pls tell me she didn’t get in trouble 😭
The poem is absolutely amazing !!! I saved the picture, i really want to keep and re-read it in the future !
Just curious, did this kid survive an actual car crash? Or is it a made-up story?
This is pretty metal. For 9 this is pretty good. I'm sure most adults couldn't come up something better.
Please let her know that we all love her poem too! And also please let us know- she didn’t get in trouble, did she? Please tell me they’re fostering her talent and not smothering it!
please, whatever you do DO NOT silence that kid, i really hope his parents encourage his creativity that poem is genuinely good
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Perfect visuals. This kiddo has some awesome creative writing future. Hope the school system sees that. When my youngest was in 1st grade she hurt her knee and described the wound as “damage”. I was promptly called in and told she was “weird”, seriously, teachers word. I pulled her out for homeschooling.
Reminds me of Happy Tree Friends
Ah, I see you are a person of culture 🧐
This could totally be a Dethklok song
That's a masterpiece
That “Silence for a second” line makes the following terror hit so hard. INCREDIBLE writing for a 9 yr old. This girl knows what’s up.
I like it :)
Stephanie king😂😂😂
that’s fucking great haha
This kid is a genius. Maybe a bit on the dark side ..but genius neverless
I love horror movies so I see nothing wrong. He is 9 years old. What is he exposed to?
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Next Stephen King
Damn sneaky snakes will get you!! This kids going places!! I hope they encourage him to keep writing he’s really got an act for it 🤣
Not to be that guy - but we're not questioning this level of writing for a 9 year old?
I love it!
Wow a nine year old wrote this. I read it as if it was an adult. He should be commended and encouraged to write more.
she
The tiger
You know that's not a bad little poem itself, right there.
Kids always have intense imaginations. Sometimes that intensity goes to some pretty dark places, and that's a good thing. It's a young mind trying to make sense of the world. When the adults in their lives react in horror and disgust, they teach the kids to suppress their imaginations. This is why we live in a world with so many incurious, unimaginative, bitter adults. Let kids be morbid. Let them imagine whatever they want. If what they come up with seems genuinely concerning, just keep an eye on it, but don't shame them or punish them for it. In fact, do the opposite - encourage them to express what's on their minds so you can see what's going on and know how to help them.
“Sneaky Snake bites the dangling foot” is the new “Don’t Tread on Me”
This reminds me of something my five-year-old did while he was drawing at home one day. He looked up at me and said, "Don't cry. It's only a joke!" And proceeded to tell a story about everyone we knew getting mauled by monsters. His accompanying drawings featured clawed hands coming out of the side of the page, like the Babadook. And there was blood. So much blood. He went on to tell this story to everyone else, and we had to ask him to stop. My dad blames it on me because I'm a morbid true crime writer, but I swear it came out of nowhere.
And I’m like “Wow! I’ve never met another Jem before!”
Fuck these fucking people lying about what their stupid fucking kids said. No fucking way this was written by a 9 fucking year old, fuck me jesus.
Nothing wrong with this poem 😁
Lol, I'd be so proud, that shit was good.
This little girl is my hero
I hope they encourage her to write even more. That was ver impressive
I see Wednesday Addams hit 4th grade.
Are they made from real girl scouts?
Damn sneaky snek
This is actually great. "Jem hangs from a powerline" is such a banger of a line
I will be watching this kid's career with great interest. The writing is good that it was able to covey the horror properly
This kid is going places. I'm not an author or anything but I'm fairly certain this is better than anything I've ever written.
When I was in 3rd grade we did "Journal Time" where the teacher would play music and we would write about what it made us think about. In October she used a "spooky" track that involved some deep voices, clinking chains and the like.
If this was genuinely written by a 9 year old, it’s god damn impressive!
gotta love that sneaky snake alliteration
Yes, a 9 year old definitely wrote this.
You can just see in the carefully structured sentences that use alliteration. This is so abstracted that a lot of adults wouldn’t even be able to come up with this. This is just another example in the long list of “shit redditors do for karma”.
Very Jim Morrison. Has this kid been listening to the Doors?
thathappened
Maybe my school was just messed up, but we used to sing playground songs about killing Barney with a plank of wood. Kids can be weirdly morbid
People are so gullible
pretty sure this was written by an adult looking for karma
Right? I'm surprised so many people believe this one.
I've seen plenty of writing like this from kids of a similar age in the gifted program.
Stop lying
A 9 year old kid DID NOT write that.
This is great. Makes me think of Tim Burtons poetry.
That's incredibly disturbing.
this is basically old pig destroyer lyrics
I like it. Better than the shit I was writing at nine.
You know, I'm listening to some death metal while reading this... Extremely fitting. I love this poem.
God damn my dudes, the peguin just standing here getting blamed for all this shit wtf did he even do?
You know, poems are around mostly because people need to express their feelings. Mostly the bad ones, that they dont know how to expres.
Upset everyone...the teacher?
This kid named Wednesday Addams?
Honestly that’s good and if a nine year old really wrote that they have serious potential as a writer and poet.
This child is a genius! All the stuff they wrote about can be found in video games or tv shows or movies. So no, it doesn't mean they are "evil" or "bound to hurt someone."
I love it when a brilliant child shakes up a school with poetry.
Id be pissed if I was the parent. Kids clearly made a good fuckin poem. Better give him a good grade dammit
But this would be the dopest metal song I’ve ever heard 😂
That kid is on her way to reading a poem at a Presidential inauguration
It's not a poem, it's a Slayer song. 🤘🏼
America 2022 : Creativity stifled by an incessant need to find virtue in everything
I think you should emphasize to your friend that this is an absolutely banger of a poem. It’s a bit dark but this kid has pure talent
I mean it doesn't feel like the kids a psycho, but more like he/she's been influenced by some great writers. It's not easy to paint a picture like that
Just going to point out, little Stevie King would have never made it out of grade school today. They would have sent him for therapy and slapped a label on him really quickly.
If this is real (which i doubt). She has some talent.
The kid's name is Wednesday Adams